that first ray
peaking through the shade
is rigid and cold,
a separating blade,
and nothing I feed upon
as day stretches on,
satisfies my hunger
for, dawn is but a disruption,
peeling you from me
in the dusk, I dawn,
next to you
-artwork my Steve K found via google; poem shared in response to dVerse Poets Pub‘s quadrille prompt, dawn
So much here, Angela! I love that you “dawn” and dusk falls. That awakening says so much. This piece is tender, loving, simmering close to steaming… outstanding! WOW, indeed!
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Thank you so much, Walter!
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“for, dawn is but a disruption,
peeling you from me”
WOW! WOW! 🙂
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Thank you, Rosema!
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dawn is but a disruption,
peeling you from me… nicely done!
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Thank you!
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Great! The verse “in the dusk, I dawn” evokes a strong image, full of contrasting darkness and light.
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Thank you, Adriana. 💜
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Love the way you merge and twist dusk and dawn.
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Thank you, Sarah!
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Lovely!
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Thank you, Magarisa!
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You’re welcome, Angela. 🙂
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Very well written.
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Thank you, Paul. 💜
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Really, really good. Impressed.
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Thank you, Joseph!
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Love the use of dawn… I would love to dawn… (but too often I yawn)
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Thank you, Björn. Haha!
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I have forgotten most of what I knew about poetry structure. This is lovely!
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I’m not sure I learned a whole lot about forms other than some basic stuff. I’d love to explore more!
Thank you, Meg!
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You’re very welcome!
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Nice switching of pleasure from dawn to dusk.
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Thank you, Frank. 💜
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Beautifully said,
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Thank you, Rosemary. 💜
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I love that separating blade and the dawning next to you~ Romantic, smiles ~
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Thank you, Grace. 💜
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